Mikey, I'm noticing an increasingly lyrical bent to your writing - not to be disparraged (not least because I deliberately do it, myself ) - however do let me step in with a (totally unsolicited, if not uncalled-for
) tip, or two.
1) When writing of the "beauty that those boats present", I don't think you want to use the word "present", so much as embody. The former is (more or less) to offer something - whereas the latter is to posess the thing (beauty). Do make a note of it!
2) Also - and I realize this is a personal aesthetic judgement - but, instead of "wicked" beauty, I would have chosen "deadly" or "lethal", as more appropriate. I think "wicked beauty" conjures up something more along the lines of:
-Matty
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