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Re: Shucked Morning

Posted by Tim on 6/28/2002, 9:38 am

Very nice. Just a few tips to think about. Trying to eliminate all those ands. Make shorter complete sentences. I think it will improve the rythm of the poem. ...curtsy the breeze maybe curtsy in the breeze. Your verb tense seems to keep changing. Try to stick with one, re: drew, saw and then escape in the same stanza. Thanks for the read. Tim

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