Posted by Windstorm (aka Seapoet) on 4/23/2002, 6:54 am You lost me when you said "an arena is darkened Are you referring to trees and leaves, and forest things when you say "decorum"? "and helplessness as it unfolds its wrappings with soft, soft movements"---could afford to lose the word "and". The poem jumps off the cliff here "above the lighted glasswooden stairs sing of a divine madness meant for someone else but it is you who is here instead". Very vague in it's reference to who or what lighted glass? The sky? If one is bound by a single thread why would he/she rise slowly? Would it not be freeing you? Some of the descriptions seem to be reaching, but who knows for what? : ) Thanks for the read.
"a great movement in the dark starts along the floor" seemed like it wanted to read ---a great movement starts along the floor in the dark.
to fit all thoughts with appropriate dignity". What thoughts? This seemed out of context with the rest of the poem, or at least unclarified. Maybe it's your use of the word "appropriate". That's a pretty vague word that seems to make the line a filler.
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