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Re: madness in my blood

Posted by Windstorm (aka Seapoet) on 4/21/2002, 12:21 am

Hi..I liked the way "A dead language in the blood " appeared to explain the first stanza. I wondered why you asked "Is it my mind that travels at night? To places I do not know?" I would have thought you knew it was your mind! Though I liked "All vanished animals weep. Cities, built merely to fall, drown in birds" I wondered about "drown in birds". It feels good but it may be obscure to someone isn't exploring slanted metaphor. "For insects have a beauty that hurts," This was very nice, very descriptive! Maybe you could explain how our days are like smoke. It is a one liner from out of seemingly nowhere. "The vine is heavy again with the sweetest grapes." This had quite a cliche feel to it. You use a lot of metaphor but I don't see how it expresses the personal aspects to this poem. I generally liked the feel of it and I can read a lot into vague metaphors. Not everyone can. : )

Message Thread: madness in my blood - jürgendeus 4/20/2002, 11:42 pm Revived - Jeff Couchman 1/29/2003, 2:19 pm Re: Revived - George London 1/29/2003, 2:22 pm Re: madness in my blood - Windstorm (aka Seapoet) 4/21/2002, 12:21 am Re: madness in my blood - jürgendeus 4/21/2002, 7:01 pm Re: madness in my blood - Windstorm (aka Seapoet) 4/21/2002, 7:03 pm Re: madness in my blood - jürgendeus 4/21/2002, 9:49 pm Re: madness in my blood - Windstorm (aka Seapoet) 4/21/2002, 9:57 pm Re: madness in my blood - jürgendeus 4/21/2002, 10:46 pm « Back to thread

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